Basically, a paragraph is unified by mutually supported sentences. The word ‘unity’ means ‘oneness’. All sentences in a paragraph should focus on the one thing expressed in the topic sentence; all sentences stick together. Unity can be achieved as long as the paragraph has a good, clear topic sentence. If not, we will find it very difficult to control the flowing-in of information and as a result, we might include irrelevant information into the paragraph we are writing.
In a unified paragraph, the subject and the attitude in the topic sentence must be explained thoroughly. The ‘problem’ stated in the sentence has to be settled. All supporting sentences function to clarify the ‘problem’ that is the Topic Sentence. The writer should present it understandably, and interesting to read. So that, the readers should not spend extra time and energy to comprehend the message well.
Read the following paragraph:
(1) Melisa has chosen five possible future careers. (2)Firstly, she wants to become a journalist for an English magazine. (3) Her friends at campus plan to do much more challenging jobs, anyway. (4)Secondly, she might become a dress designer. (5) Finally, she could possibly be a tourist guide.
This paragraph does not fully explain what it must explain. If the Topic Sentence states that Melisa has five choices, the paragraph has to inform the five choices. If not the readers will not be satisfied. Because they still expect to be told the choices which the Topic Sentence promises.
Furthermore, we need to point out the third (3) sentence: “Her friends at campus plan to do much more challenging jobs, anyway.” is irrelevant. It does not add useful information to develop the Topic Sentence.
Consequently, we ought to revise the paragraph above. It might then read as follows:
Melisa has chosen five possible future careers. Firstly, she wants to become a journalist for an English magazine. Secondly, she might become a radio announcer. Thirdly, she intends to work as an interpreter. Fourthly, she is also interested in being an English teacher. Finally, she could possibly be a tourist guide. Certainly, Melisa should study hard to prepare herself for the jobs in the future.
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